Seriously, you write the best Spike. I know this wasn't an exercise in characterization, and it's all Xander's perspective anyway, but moments like "says slightly bewildered air of a man who realizes, mid-sermon, that he's preaching to the choir" make for the best Spike. (And "Shoulda told me... I'd've..." I repeat: best kinds of Spike)
Re the actual smutty bits: You've got nothing to be ashamed of as far as I can see. It's not 100% action, I think you back it off and let the audience in on a little reflection exactly where you should - moments like "Spike's body is unequivocal. It says: I. Want. You" are definitely not Ikea porn. :-)
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Re the actual smutty bits: You've got nothing to be ashamed of as far as I can see. It's not 100% action, I think you back it off and let the audience in on a little reflection exactly where you should - moments like "Spike's body is unequivocal. It says: I. Want. You" are definitely not Ikea porn. :-)