http://raynejelly.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] raynejelly.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] baudown 2012-09-10 09:41 pm (UTC)

Wow. As ever I am just... awed. Jealous. REALLY Jealous.

You write with such clean, precise language and a... I hate to say distance because that's so often used pejoratively, but I'm going to use it anyway, distance and reflection that I really enjoy. "He tells himself, relieved, that the thing with Spike was an anomaly, a purely biological response, a mercifully brief betrayal by his body." This kind of thing - "he tells himself" feels so indicative of lying to himself, and "mercifully brief betrayal" it's just... pretty. Very elegantly done.

Re: The Sex. ... I know, I hate it too. Somehow I always manage to descend into sloppy metaphor...

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